The Polish twins - FMFormation.net - Football Manager

Colskillzy · 17-07-08, 05:51 PM

Hi everyone, I have started writing this story called "The Polish Twins" now don't be expecting anything brilliant, or even anything better than poor as it is my first story and i don't think that i am very good

If you don't quite understand what the story is about, read this spoiler after reading the first part (This whole post is the first part, and i will keep adding new parts as i go along)

Spoiler

The Polish Twins

United States of America, 2001

"Now!" On hearing one another shout that command, Petr and Lukasz both ran through the MGM Grands' Double doors, ran around one of the many corners in the luxury casino, slid under an oncoming wheelie tray that had just came out of one of the many doors got back up and just rolled through to the casino vault as the sliding electric door was closing and all in time with each other! They then both whipped out their dual desert eagles and shot all 8 of the bewildered, assault rifle-wielding guards in a matter of seconds, hitting every single one of them in the neck twice, killing them all instantly.

Now all they had to do was to get through the 8 number combination lock on the big classical looking vault standing in front of them. "08954762" Petr announced, as if he was the one who set the combination. Lukasz quickly span each of the 8 silver plated combination wheels and as if by magic, they all stopped exactly on the correct code. There was a subtle click, and the vault door swang open, it was like something from a cartoon! They Hurled their bodies into the vast vault in front of them and forced their hands to grab as many of the expensive-looking gym bags which they knew where full of crispy £50 notes. The notes where in English as they where ready to be flown over to England later that day.

They ran out with the gym bags pretty much covering their whole bodies, opened the electric door with a flick of a switch, ran back around the corner, and started walking out of the doors as if nothing had happened at all despite them looking like overgrown gym bag monsters. Lukasz opened their black honda civic using the electric key and they both emptied the bags into 2 large suitcases that where waiting in the boot. Lukasz got in the drivers seat and petr jumped in the back through the window which he thought he had left open but hadn't, which turned a few heads to say the least!

Lukasz put the key in the ignition and turned it, the gentle humming of an engine started and he pulled off driving on the wrong side of the road around the corner just narrowly missing the old woman that was bent over in the middle of the road blindly looking for her dog, which was on its lead, and in front of her as well. "Stupid bitch" Lukasz muttered.

I have a little bit more of the story already written, but i thought i'd wait for feedback before posting the rest of what i have written so far.
So please leave honest feedback, positive or negative i don't mind

losblancos · 17-07-08, 06:50 PM

Very interesting I must admit. Looking forward to seeing how this story unfolds.

**Hartynips** · 17-07-08, 07:57 PM

Desert Eagles? Shooting guards and robbing a casino?

Is this FMF related????

Good story though mate whatever happens!

Master_Woodchuck · 17-07-08, 09:41 PM

Lol desert eagles and robbing a casino sound like me n u luke.

**liveru** · 17-07-08, 11:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Colskillzy

So please leave honest feedback, positive or negative i don't mind

I honestly can't see anything negative to say about this mate.
Looks great.
It's a brilliant idea to incorporated into Football Manager and it's a great start.

Can't wait to see more.

Colskillzy · 18-07-08, 07:25 AM

Thanks everyone :)
Yes it is FMF related Harty, just not yet

here the next bit.

The Polish Twins

The Airport

Lukasz and Petr Pacolski are not your average Polish 32 Year-Old twins, for a start they look nothing like each other, which isn't exactly normal for twins, and secondly, they can see up to 10 minutes at a time into the future. Yes you heard me right! That is how they knew exactly what to do in robbing one of the most famous casinos in America! Anyway, Lukasz was your average human, well he wasn't, but he looked like one. He had permanently spiky dark brown hair and was about 6 foot. Petr had a blonde spiked up mohican and like i said not long ago, looked nothing like Lukasz. Back to the story then i suppose.

"So where are we going now then?" Petr questioned.
"Airport" Lukasz replied sharply
"Airport?"
"Yeah, you know, big building, has planes, where you go if you want to go to a different country"
"I know what an airport is fool! But we've just stolen £21 million from an American casino, they aren't exactly going to let us go are they?
"Two words for you Petr"
"I've got two words for you as well!"
"Fake passports"
"Clever Bastard!"

There was a silence for the rest of the journey to the nearest airport.
"So, um, how are we getting a flight without any tickets?" Petr asked as they where parking, not too close to the airport.
"You ask too many questions." Was the reply, and he got out the car, somehow making the door shut its self. "You are bloody unpredictable sometimes i tell you!" Petr exclaimed as he jumped out of the car and slammed it shut.
"That would be me."

They both pulled their suitcases out of the boot of their car and Petr shut the boot while Lukasz searched around in a hidden pocket of his jacket. He pulled two blue covered passports out and threw one at the head of an unexpecting Petr, who was facing the other way. "Idiot" he shouted, then quickly forgot what had happened and picked the fake passport up off of the floor. They walked quickly but cautiously towards the airport, and after a few minutes of walking reached the revolving doors and entered with their "luggage" cool as cucumbers. The huge clock that no sane person could miss as you come into the airport showed the time as 3:30 in the morning. Petr instantly asked for the time unaware of his idiocy. "We have 30 minutes" Lukasz said after tutting.
"Helpfu... Oooh!" he had just realised the enormous time-teller that was stealing the wall in front of him.

Lukasz walked briskly towards the EasyJet queue, which had no-one in it, and Petr followed. "Tickets" A short fat American demanded as soon as they reached him. Lukasz said nothing, but reached into his pocket and took out two Easyjet tickets to Finland for 4:00AM, he placed them above the americans hand so the tickets weren't touching him and as the american went to grab them he dropped them and said sarcasticly "Oh, im so sorry!" making the poor man bend over revealing his beer belly. Petr chuckled to himself behind them. "Go through then" The ticket person ordered, annoyed. "You tight..." Petr laughed when they where out of earshot of the overweight American. Lukasz gave a slightly evil-sounding laugh and carried on walking. They got on their plane, and took off.

**liveru** · 18-07-08, 12:31 PM

Another cracking update Colskillzy.

Keep up the good work.

Master_Woodchuck · 19-07-08, 08:53 AM

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Originally Posted by Colskillzy

"So where are we going now then?" Petr questioned.
"Airport" Lukasz replied sharply
"Airport?"
"Yeah, you know, big building, has planes, where you go if you want to go to a different country"
"I know what an airport is fool! But we've just stolen £21 million from an American casino, they aren't exactly going to let us go are they?
"Two words for you Petr"
"I've got two words for you as well!"
"Fake passports"
"Clever Bastard!"

Made me LOL

Colskillzy · 21-07-08, 09:53 PM

Here is the rest, seems to be dead, lol, im not surprised with my lack of writing ability

Finland

6 Years later

"£9 million left still"
"Same" "How much do you reckon we will need?"
"£5 mil should do probably"
"ok lets go"

Lukasz jumped into his convertable porsche, waited for peter to jump in the other side, put the key in the ignition, and turned it. A roar burst out from the inside of the car suddenly, he revved the car a few times before setting off to a poor, unknown football stadium. The Tammelan stadium in Tampere. Owned by finnish first division (the bottom flight) club Tampereen Peli-Pojat-70 or PP-70 for short.

They arrived, and Lukasz pulled up outside the small stadium, Petr waited in the Porsche. Lukasz casually walked into the stadium and found his way to the board room, where he of course, knew the chairman was in. "Lets cut this short Mr Kainulainen, i will pay the club £5,000,000 if you sack Topi Priha as manager, and hire me!" He, of course already knew that the chairman would accept this what was an amazing offer to a small club like them. The chairman in fact, didn't hesitate and sacked Topi almost instantly! "I know you have no managerial past, and i have no idea how good a manager you are, but that is an offer i cannot refuse, welcome to PP-70!"
"I knew you would see sense, i'll start tomorrow morning ok? there is something else i have to sort out first." Lukasz said firmly. "Ok, see you here tomorrow at 10 then." the chariman replied.

With that, Lukasz left the board room, walked out of the stadium and got back in the metallic silver porshe with burberry interior and an evil murderous looking spoiler that was waiting for him at the entrance with Petr at the wheel. "shift" Lukasz ordered, and Petr effortlessly lifted himself up and slided sideways into the passenger seat. They drove off, and braced themselves for the journey to Lappenranta to the stadium named Kimpinen, which was owned by another Finnish first division club called Rakuunat. Petr also offered the same as Lukasz had, £5,000,000 for the club if the chairman sacks their manager and hires him as the new one. The chairman obviously accepted straight away. Lukasz then left Petr in Lappenranta, where Petr had alreay bought a house for himself, and drove off back to Tampere, back to his house where his nice comfy bed was waiting for him to fall into and doze off.

Master_Woodchuck · 21-07-08, 10:27 PM

Lol nice KIU cant wait so see how you and my polish conterpart do

**ChrisA** · 22-07-08, 07:44 AM

this is great mate KUTGW ;)

**liveru** · 22-07-08, 12:13 PM

Another great update Col.

This is another story I'm really enjoying.

jakielove · 22-07-08, 03:25 PM

Good update well presented
hope to see more

soulzNUFC · 22-07-08, 03:50 PM

Just started reding this and it is amazing!
KUTGW!

Colskillzy · 22-07-08, 03:54 PM

Thanks everyone, im not sure wether to do the football manager part in report style or in story style like it has been so far. anyone help me out please?

**Jonners71** · 22-07-08, 03:58 PM

well you have already got 2 good characters so a story would be cool but whatever you find easiest and most enjoyable to write - either way I'm sure it's going to continue to be excellent

Colskillzy · 22-07-08, 04:04 PM

Yeah i will probably continue writing as a story then. Thanks =]

Master_Woodchuck · 22-07-08, 06:35 PM

Cant wait for the next update colskillzy keeps texting me the results lol

**Bowser** · 22-07-08, 07:13 PM

Poor guy who got sacked but eh, who cares? Good luck and cracking idea mate.

**Hartynips** · 26-07-08, 03:06 PM

Well at least you didnt top the manage or chairman to get what you wanted!

Great updates